An empty shell
Devoid of family warmth
No tv glow
No snuggling on the couch
No home-cooked meal aromas carried on the breeze
You haven’t had family in you for years
A for sale sign, a cry of loneliness
Uncut grass, like an unkempt beard
I feel your depression like a burlap cloak
Where are the little children’s feet, padding across your hardwood floors?
The peals of laughter, do they still echo in your empty rooms?
You still feel the vibrations, the resonance, don’t you?
Oh, I see…life breathes in you still…
Groundhogs have made your front porch their home
Pigeons roostย in your attic, cooing out their greetings to you
Is this consolation?
Are you happy?
Whenย we grow old, solitary, with wild hair and wilder ideas, mumbling to ourselves…
with only our thoughts, our pigeons in the attic, to keep us company…are we you?
Are you labeled crazy by the other houses for not wanting to be inhabited?
Are we, humans, crazy for the same reasons?
Or…are weย both just waiting for someone to turn the key?
Clever (:
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Thank you ๐
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This is lovely
Thanks for stopping by my blog.
Have a great day ๐
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Thank you…and my pleasure ๐
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This is rich and soul searing. A gem!
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Thank you so much. It had been ruminating around in my mind for some time. I finally let it out. I’m glad you liked it. ๐
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Poignant…yet there’s hope in the last line. Brilliant!
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Oh, and Happy Father’s Day!
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Than you…it’s extra special this year for me as you know ๐
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Thank so much ๐
It felt right with that ending…couldn’t end it on a completely down note.
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Wow, this is an amazing poem, I absolutely love it!! I love good last lines and that one is great!!!! ๐
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Thank you so much! It really flowed and the last line just clicked for me. ๐
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I can see why, it’s a great one!!
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Excellent!
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Thanks ๐
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A very brilliant take on things. I shall never look at an abandoned house the same.
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That’s quite a compliment…thank you so much! This is the kind of comment that makes writing worthwhile. ๐
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Your writing is very worth reading
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Brilliant! Absolutely amazing analogy! ๐
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Thank you so much! ๐
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Love the turn at the end. Bravo!
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Thank you ๐
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Solid depictions and imagery here!
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Thank you so much! ๐
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Quite different, refreshing to read! ๐
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Thank you…I had fun writing it. It was flapping about in my head for a while. ๐
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Tom Waits also thinks about this: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W0YxjH09TDU
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Wow…very nice! I’ve never heard that song before, so it’s kinda nice knowing others see it like I do. Thanks for sharing!
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Hi Erich. Thanks for all your follows. Will be back. Chevvy
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My pleasure…thanks for stopping in. ๐
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I always feel bad about the sad houses. Neglected, lonely. Good poem. Many thanks for stopping by my blog.
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I agree, a house that used to be a home. Very sad.
My pleasure…thanks for visiting as well! ๐
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Nice! I once wrote a short story with similar title, so caught my attention when I sae this.
I think I’m going to love your blog
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I hope you will, though you are putting a lot of pressure on me ๐
Thanks ๐
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Gorgeous
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Thank you…glad you liked it ๐
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A lovely piece. The parallels between the old house and old humans is clever and I would echo some of the other comments that the last line is spot on. I’m far from a poetry expert but it read beautifully to this layman! Cheers, Nik
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I’m as green as the grass when it comes to writing poetry, I started writing it when I started this blog, so I’m very happy you liked it!
Thanks again! ๐
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Never be afraid or sorry for old age , its a process until we throw our old clothes we don’t buy new ,so body is clothes and soul is resident ,so we need to leave this body ,in between we are old
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I had meant it more as a metaphor for loneliness and depression but I can see how it could be interpreted as growing old, but I really like the message you bring and am glad you brought it. Thank you for the kind words ๐
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Most welcome , I understood the metaphor you have used ,I used it other way as more we exchange views ,more creativity will flourish ,god bless
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A beautiful, haunting poem. Thanks for visiting my site and liking my post.
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Thank you and it was my pleasure! ๐
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Well I appreciate the visit by you to my blog! I haven’t happy since we like many went through job loss, financial crisis, lost the house, one of our cars, health ins. blah, blah, blah. I feel so disconnected without our home since 2009. Things are better today, but for my husbands job, we are living in Arizona right now, not in So. Oregon. And I don’t have to like it! LOL. Enjoying your blog and posts! ๐
*Catherine*
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They closed the plant that I was was working at. I was lucky enough to get another job before they locked the doors…my wife wasn’t so lucky. We ended up losing one of our vehicles and going bankrupt, so I feel your pain. We’re getting by alright but definitely not living the dream. I’m glad you enjoyed my blog. ๐
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“Not living the dream,” boy do I hear that! LOL. Things are getting better ๐
Yes, I enjoyed your blog and will be back to visit again. Have a great 4th! ๐
*Catherine*
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You have a great 4th as well! ๐
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This is truly beautiful. Scary and sad that we are all headed the same way.
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Maybe we should leave our doors wide open. ๐
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I am always captured by the sight of an abandoned house. Somehow I feel it speaking to me as your poem does.
Lily
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I am the same way. I am glad you liked it ๐
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Hey Erich I have put you up for a challenge if you would like to accept ๐ please follow the link and have fun! https://kaitkingthewriter.wordpress.com/2015/07/09/3-quotes-a-day-challenge-day-1/
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Hey Kait, I tried the link but it keeps coming up “page not found.” Is this something on your end or mine. O..o
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Oh bum! Will check Erich – sorry about that!
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Not a problem ๐
Thanks
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https://kaitkingthewriter.wordpress.com/2015/07/10/3-quotes-a-day-challenge-day-1/ – am just repeating the link in the hope that it will now connect….sigh! Things never go as you plan! ๐
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Success! ๐
Weird…I tried the old link just a few minutes ago and it still didn’t work, but we’re good to go now ๐
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YaaaaY! Yeah it is weird cos I think it’s the same link anyway! ๐ glad your on now though ๐
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Me too ๐
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Just tested it from your site and it’s working – so fingers crossed it does for you too – sorry about the hiccup and thanks for the heads up – will change the other two too ๐
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Glad I could help! ๐
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I enjoy the ending how you tie in the house to human experience. It also has a nice rhythm of words
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Thank you ๐
It seemed so dark…the ending gave some hope. I don’t know if I was consciously aware of the rhythm when I wrote it…maybe subconsciously, so that’s interesting.
Thanks for the feedback ๐
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